Flash Fiction – Part 1

That title is incredibly optimistic.  It implies ongoing capability and commitment.  I accepted BrainRants’ challenge to write a short-short story.  Go to Rochelle’s, Addicted to Purple blog.  Each week, she publishes a picture.  You are to use the photo as a prompt, and write a complete story about it, in only 100 words.  Below is my first attempt.

PENSIVE

miriam-reubenShe paused to reminisce.  She wrote to her mother regularly, but so many things had happened.

Those years ago, as a newlywed, leaving the safety of New York for the wilds of the Oklahoma Territory with an ambitious husband, had seemed both a wild risk, and a marvelous adventure.

His tenacity, intelligence and canny business sense had combined to make him the proprietor of the greatest and finest Dry Goods Emporium in the Territory.

Being his family had made her and their beloved children both safe, and well taken care of.  Civilization continued to sprout around them.  Mother would be pleased.

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14 thoughts on “Flash Fiction – Part 1

  1. BrainRants says:

    Well done, Archon! Great start.

  2. 1jaded1 says:

    Seven sentences of awesome!

  3. Jim Wheeler says:

    Redolent of haiku, which is not bad. A little too spicy with commas, perhaps. :smile:

  4. Archon's Den says:

    Perhaps, though it’s what I do to direct readers. No sense rushing through a hundred words. It is much like haiku, to construct so much with so little. There’s a WordPress game/exercise to do the same with exactly 33 words. While intrigued, I’ve never had the nerve to try it.

  5. benzeknees says:

    Nicely written Archon! A completely different take on this pic than anything else I have seen.

  6. Very impressive, Archon! The flash was perfect for the picture.

    • Archon's Den says:

      Thank you so much! Like my new emoticons? I’m taking credit for them too. :D

      • You’re welcome!
        ..and, yes, I’ve noticed these new faces around blogtown (a little darker and a bit different) You’ll have to show me the one with ears and fire in his eyes. (I always liked him the best – he was like the evil little bastard of emoticons)..

      • Archon's Den says:

        I hadn’t tried those since the new crowd strolled in. This is “twisted” :twisted: And this is “evil” :evil:
        The Good Luck coin you sent to me turns out to be a zhongguo renmin yinhang from Communist China. Like pennies and dollars, it’s a smaller part of the “Yuang”, and worth about .16 of an American dollar, a dime-and-a-half. I didn’t know you had any Ambassadors living in The Hood. If the Chinese call in all their loans and repossess North America, these might become more common. Thanx again! 8O

  7. “Twisted” and “Evil” are twins!
    Yes, of course, it was a zhongguo renmin yinhang from Communist China…(I was just testing the extent of your knowledge, Archon)…too bad it’s worthless (the coin not your knowledge). I was kinda hoping for a, “Hot-diggity-dog, Whitelady – it’s worth a million-and-a-half”..you could have bought the sail boat you’ve always dreamed of and I could have moved to the Northwest Woods..
    and do not mock the diversity of the Chinese Ambassadors of the Hood…they own the Chinese Nail Salon AND Eggroll Express!

  8. Dear Paul,

    This is where I would’ve welcomed you to Friday Fictioneers had I known. Lovely story. Grandma Miriam would be pleased. ;)

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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