Flash Fiction #8

Paradise

 

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Even after working for years among the madding crowd, to afford it, he didn’t think one percent of those who’d attended his retirement party realized that, “Getting away from it all” meant owning a small, offshore island.

Almost self-sufficient, he only came to “town” about once a month.  Today, after some shopping, he would sooner be at the diner beyond the dentist’s back window than in this chair, but he’d need good teeth to continue to enjoy that.

One hour, and one bacon cheeseburger from now, he’d be on the little ferry, back to Eden.

 

Go to Rochelle’s, Addicted to Purple blog, and use her weekly Wednesday photo as a prompt to write a complete, 100 word story.

 

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20 thoughts on “Flash Fiction #8

  1. Dan Antion says:

    That’s sounds good. The island and the cheeseburger 🙂

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  2. BrainRants says:

    The bacon cheeseburger made this.

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  3. elappleby says:

    Lovely idea – a small offshore island (aren’t all islands off shore, by definition?!)
    I may have to work harder than I am to achieve it – with my current retirement plan, I might manage a deckchair by the sea (just)
    Fun story 🙂

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    • Archon's Den says:

      Off-shore only technically. Common usage says any easily reached (1/2 mile/by swimming?) island is onshore.
      I live on the east shore of Lake Huron. Just north of me is Manitoulin Island, an onshore island because it can be reached by swing-bridge. In the middle of this largish island is a decent-sized lake. In the middle of that lake, is another small island.
      Little fleas have smaller fleas, upon their backs to bite ’em.
      And so on, and so on – so on ad infinitum. 😯

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  4. Nan Falkner says:

    Dear Archon’s Den: Gosh, you should be a stand-up comic too! I love your story and then I read the story afterward, my husband would have gotten arrested too – he would have laughed – heck everyone with a sense of humor – would have laughed! You are very talented! Nan 🙂

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  5. Archon's Den says:

    I’m glad that you liked my short story. Most of my posts are somewhat longer. Every couple of weeks I dredge up and spew onto my site from a humor file acquired from 30 years of working near the copier. The bus story is about 50 years old. What is not funny about it, is the 50s/60s strait-laced mindset that, if you laughed on the bus, someone could have you arrested. Remember the “Good Old Days?”

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  6. Good story. This is the dream of many a retiree. Well written. 🙂 —Susan

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  7. Sandra says:

    Idyllic. The cheeseburger, I mean.

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  8. Dear A.D.

    I’m counting down the days to my retirement next year. Working in a bakery and dealing with all manner of people makes me want to embrace the hermit’s life. Your story made me long for it all the more. Yes, it’s tough to gum a bacon cheeseburger. Nicely done.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • Archon's Den says:

      The worst thing wrong with customer-service jobs, is usually the customers. I don’t think I could do it. The wife wanted me to take a part-time job as a Wal-Mart greeter. I’m afraid I’d be like Jeff Dunham’s, Walter character. “Welcome to Wal-Mart. Now get yer s**t , and get out.”
      Stores have survey forms to identify good clerks. Perhaps they should have some for bonehead shoppers. *I don’t care if you’re 47, you shouldn’t be allowed out without your Momma!*

      Archon

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      • Dear A.D.

        Walter as a Wal-mart greeter? I love the image. Perhaps you should send that idea to Jeff Dunham.
        I work in Redneckia and my eyes grow cold every time someone comes and asks, “Can I get a cake wrote on?” And it goes downhill from there. My store is where they come to shop when they’re finished terrorizing Wal-mart.

        Shalom,

        Rochelle

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      • Archon's Den says:

        Oy vey! If you ever have some free time (could happen), you might enjoy my Rednecks, But In A Good Way post. 🙂

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  9. Good teeth are very important especially if one wants to live long and enjoy the good life on an island. Well done.

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  10. Hope it works for him. He’ll need to keep flossing, though.

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