Flash Fiction #9








I told the kids I didn’t want them to get a hamster, but they just thought I was being grumpy old dad, again.

“We’ll feed it, and water it, and make sure it stays in its cage, ALL the time.”  Yeah, right!

So, here I am, with half this wall ripped down, and still no hamster.  We can hear it, but we still can’t see it.  If it dies in there, I don’t know which will be worse, the stench, or the kids’ wails.

I’ll need to use their college fund to hire a drywaller.  Shoulda got them a turtle!


Go to Rochelle’s Addicted to Purple site.  Use the weekly Wednesday photo as a prompt, and write a complete 100 word story.

And a shout-out to my chiropractor, who now reads my drivel, and without whom, I could not sit comfortably and compose it – straighten the kid out today!


18 thoughts on “Flash Fiction #9

  1. Honie Briggs says:

    This actually happened years ago to a neighbor of ours. Her grandson’s gerbil somehow got behind a wall. Poor thing.


  2. hugmamma says:

    Totally relatable Thankfully, never happened. Fun story, at least for this parent.


  3. This was such a joy to read. There had been several times that a mouse was in our wall, and we always checked to see if our hamster was gone before going after it. I think nothing is worse then the stench of a rotting corpse in the wall! I really loved this!


  4. I can see this scene unfold easily. My guess, the kid’s wails would be worse.


  5. elappleby says:

    Very funny – I love this take on the prompt 🙂


  6. Sometimes being kind (i.e. buying a gerbil) isn’t always the best idea. Great take on the prompt.


  7. Archon, That was hilarious. The real story was even funnier. 😀 I remember when our daughter’s pet rat got loose and got under a bed. Our son and I went after him and finally caught him. He was the kind of rat they use in laboratories and was very sweet tempered. My daughter heard they liked dog food chunks. He loved them “too” much. He got as fat as a little pig and we had to go back to his regular food. Well written. 🙂 —Susan


    • Archon's Den says:

      The grandson has a cute little white milk snake as a pet. A slobby ex-roommate dropped something on the screen cage cover, and put a 1 inch three-corner tear in it, which the daughter repaired with Gorilla Tape. I got to her place this morning to hear that, the snake had not actually got away, but he spent a chunk of last night carefully untaping it. Truth is stranger than fiction, because fiction has to make sense. 😯


  8. But you were thinking of remodeling anyway, right? 😉


    • Archon's Den says:

      I wasn’t then, but I am now. As you ‘catch up’, you’ll find a recent post about me having a rat in the finished basement ceiling. Four cats in the house, and I can’t get rid of him. I’ve trapped four of his concubines and one adolescent heir, but he’s a canny old rat. He chewed his way in through a dryer vent, and I found lint all over the corner of the utility room. 😈


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