Flash Fiction # 24










Loss Of Innocence

“It was a long drive, all the way from the prairies, down here to Ottawa. On the last nice day of autumn, it’s nice to be able to sit at an outdoor patio, having a coffee, right across the street from the Parliament Buildings.”

“I wonder what all those Mounties are doing??!”

“They’re chasing that guy!”

“Looks like he’s got a rifle!”

“Don’t be silly. This is Canada – people don’t run around with rifles!”

“DAMN! They’re shooting!  Quick, get inside!”

“Must be a foreign tourist! How would a tourist get a gun?”

“I’m going back to Calgary, where it’s safe!”


Go to Rochelle’s Addicted to Purple site, and use her weekly photo as a prompt to write a complete 100 word story.


15 thoughts on “Flash Fiction # 24

  1. asarpota says:

    Ha Ha. Loved the contrast…


    • Archon's Den says:

      I’m glad you liked it. I’m not sure how many readers, including Canadians, get it. Asarpota, from Dubai, above, begins his comment, “Ha Ha.” Two dead soldiers, in two days, on home soil is not a laughing matter. The world has changed. 😦

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      • wildbilbo says:

        I didnt make the connection! Without that context, it reads very innocently, even amusingly (oh those polite canadians). On its own, it could be almost lighthearted.

        But now you remind me of it, the Recent events cast a different light – the dialogue becomes less amusing and more ‘lost innocence’.

        I really should have made this connection on my own, even in australia it major news and shock for days.

        Context makes this a different story, less amusing, but certainly more dramatic.

        Still well written though 🙂


  2. Sightsnbytes says:

    nice one…actually Canadians DO run around with guns…not rifles, but shot guns….especially this time of the year in Newfoundland…Moose Hunting Season!!!!


    • Archon's Den says:

      I was going to make this group from The Rock, but thought that the Mountain Men from Alberta might be even more familiar with weapons.
      Save me a moose-haunch roast. Ah…pulled-moose burgers. 🙂


  3. My favorite : “Don’t be silly. This is Canada – people don’t run around with rifles!”


    • Archon's Den says:

      As an advocate of trained, responsible gun ownership, rather than hysterical blind banning, my favorite quote was from a recent Op-Ed letter in the Toronto Sun. “One bad guy, with a gun, was stopped by one good guy with a gun.” 😯 😉


  4. H.E. ELLIS says:

    I like your fiction, but am sad at the same time due to your country’s recent events. I hope you all heal soon.


  5. Margaret says:

    Your story is well titled. There’s a sense of innocence in the way the two observers perceive the events. Their disbelief and failure to grasp the true seriousness of the situation is reflected in their reactions.


  6. I got this right away – well done.


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