Flash Fiction #53

Weight

PHOTO PROMPT – © Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

CRUSHING WAIT

Jeremy took his parents seriously when they had explained the importance of getting into the right university to lay the groundwork for his career.

He had never missed class in high school.  He paid attention in all classes, and took excellent, extensive notes.  He had reviewed them, and crammed hard for all exams, including the fifth-year finals he had just finished.

Now, it all came down to the final results, due soon.  This was not Damocles’ Sword hanging above him, threatening a quick death.  If he didn’t qualify to get into Stamford, both he and his parents would be crushed.

Go to Rochelle’s Addicted to Purple site and use her Wednesday photo as a prompt to write a complete 100 word story.

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19 thoughts on “Flash Fiction #53

  1. BrainRants says:

    No pressure, right?

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  2. Dear Archon,

    Sounds worse than a sword hanging over him. Glancing use of the prompt. I like that.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  3. I love how you got to the picture to this story. But it’s sad that exams are the most important thing to him and his parents.

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  4. Oh dear, his future hanging in the balance! Nice one.

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  5. I got in a terrible muddle doing my exams eg 2+2=5, that sort of thing. Thank goodness I wasn’t under a chandelier!

    Rosey Pinkerton’s blog

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  6. Sightsnbytes says:

    as a person who struggled with school (especially Mathematics), many a time I felt as if I was under the swinging sword…nice take

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  7. micklively says:

    There was a tower block at Loughborough University. Eventually, they had to knock it down. The stains around the base were so difficult to remove.
    Poignant piece.

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  8. ansumani says:

    The pressure that some kids are subjected to….Nice story…and brilliant connection to the prompt picture.

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  9. Vinay Leo R. says:

    Oh dear. I can so relate to that.

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  10. It’s a shame such pressure is put on young people. His getting into Stamford is no guarantee he’l be a success in life. I hope the parents don’t push him into a major he doesn’t belong in. Well done, Archon.

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  11. Like the chandelier hanging overhead, the pressure to succeed looms large. Great story!

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  12. Oh the pressure of trying to get it right, all the time! Great story!

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  13. Amy Reese says:

    I remember that pressure. I certainly don’t miss it! Great take.

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  14. Love the way you have used the prompt. I could feel the crushing blow it would be to him and his parents.

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  15. DeeDee says:

    Nice take on the prompt. Its a hard life

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  16. EagleAye says:

    Instead of Damocles Sword it was Damocles Chandelier, right? The pressure of getting into a school can be high.

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  17. gahlearner says:

    Poor guy, how will he ever learn to deal with failure if getting into the right school is already a live or die decision? Great story.

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  18. I could feel the weight hanging over his head clearly, nicely tied to the prompt.
    Tracey

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  19. Margaret says:

    It is a very heavy looking light. I like where you went with this.

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