Flash Fiction #90

Nimrod

PHOTO PROMPT © Marie Gail Stratford

BABBLE

It was finally finished! Mr. Nimr Rad gazed about.  The entire penthouse level, the 159th floor of his towering needle in the sky, was his living suite and office.

The building had begun well, but it seemed that the higher they built, the more communication problems they had. At first, all the crews had spoken good English, but by the end, foremen seemed reduced to grunts, waving arms and pointing fingers.

From this, the highest point for hundreds of miles, he looked down upon the milling masses, and felt an almost God-like superiority.

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31 thoughts on “Flash Fiction #90

  1. neilmacdon says:

    I loved the idea of the change in the building crews as the building rose. But you don’t tell us what caused that mystery. Please don’t let it be just that foreign steeplejacks are better. I want it to be about altitude

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    • Archon's Den says:

      This is a retelling of Nimrod, and the Tower of Babel. As they grew nearer Heaven, God said, “Let us go among them and confuse their speech.” They didn’t reach Heaven, but this time, technology prevailed to (finally) complete 159 storeys. 😯

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  2. IfeomaO says:

    The fatigue kicked in, the sun got hotter and using words was just too stressful lol. Good job.

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  3. Dear Archon,

    Mr. Nimr Rad? Love it. Well written progression.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • trentpmcd says:

      I missed the name when I read it. With the name and title I might have caught on earlier, before the communications breakdown. But then, maybe I wouldn’t have….

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    • Archon's Den says:

      I felt that you would ‘get it’, if no-one else did. I’m not much of a ‘Bible person.’ I knew of the Tower of Babel, but didn’t know that Nimrod was the general contractor. I was reading a novel about magic, and just yesterday afternoon was introduced to (the Assyrian?) Nimr Rad, builder of towers. When I saw that skyscraper, I had my theme. 🙂

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  4. draliman says:

    Quite a tower of Babel (sorry, “Babble”!) he’s built for himself there.

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  5. Dale says:

    Love it… Did you know that the Canadian Native Indians were often called in to work on the tallest buildings?

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    • Archon's Den says:

      Most of them were Mohawks, from the reservation in Brantford, half an hour away. They were so well-balanced and fearless, that some show-offs would take a bicycle up, and ride it around the topmost horizontal beams. Robbie Robertson, of the Canadian group, The Band is (at least partly) Mohawk, but chose song-writing instead of steel work. 🙂

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  6. oldentimes says:

    And he can hold that feeling, until the cheap components he chose begin to crumble

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  7. Jan Brown says:

    This is a very interesting reinvention of the Tower of Babel story. And I love Mr. Nimr Rad’s name😀

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  8. BrainRants says:

    Well-crafted, Archon. You know of course that Donald Trump builds towers as well…

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  9. mjlstories says:

    Educational and entertaining! I only knew of Nimrod from the music by Elgar. Need to check out my bible…

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  10. ansumani says:

    Nice story. Understood the significance of the name from the comments. Cool.

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  11. hafong says:

    Trump Tower or Eye of the Needle?

    Lily

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  12. gahlearner says:

    I was thinking of Trump towers too, not yet familiar with Nimrod, but sure will look up Nimr Rad.

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  13. madamewriter says:

    Yes! Man thriving in artificial confines.

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    • Archon's Den says:

      studies have shown that rats, confined in heavy population densities become nasty and aggressive. It takes a particular type of mind to survive in the big city, especially in high-rises. Many of us do not possess it. 😦

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  14. Great story, universal truths can be applied anytime anywhere, as you so masterfully showed us here.

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