Flash Fiction #154




A space rock was going to pass near Earth, and he’d wanted to get a photo of it. His best chance had been Lookout Butte at 2:30 A.M., no matter what the superstitious locals said.

Okay by day, but, at night…. There’s something that eats cattle – and coyotes – and the occasional tourist.  Next they’ll claim that Bigfoot has a condo up there.

He’d heard something as he got his picture, probably a groundhog, later, as he was going through his setup shots, he spotted those two red eyes watching him. Maybe these hicks really know something after all.


Go to Rochelle’s Addicted to Purple site and use her Wednesday photo as a prompt to write a 100 word story.

20 thoughts on “Flash Fiction #154

  1. The unexplainable can often be explained by locals, if we bother to listen.


  2. BrainRants says:

    But… I eat cattle. Among other things.

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  3. Dale says:

    I think I’d quit setting up my shots and hightail it outta there!


    • Archon's Den says:

      You’ve pointed out a problem with my timeline description. I meant that he viewed this picture at a later time, possibly the next day, and was shocked by the eyes. I would change ‘but’ as he was going to ‘later,’ as he was , but WordPress is having a company picnic, and I can’t access my stats, or the edit right now. Perhaps later. 😛


  4. Dan Bohn says:

    Hey Grumpy, I like reviewing staged, and setup shots. I see all sorts of new things. “Night Watch” tracked well for me. Two red eyes are better than Three.


    • Archon's Den says:

      As Rochelle says, It’s not what we look at. It’s what we see, – often in retrospect. Hindsight is 20/20. Three red eyes might mean the Gobblemonster brought his half-wit son along. 😉 👿


  5. pennygadd51 says:

    I like the way you tied in two elements of the prompt in your story.


  6. Dear Archon

    So them locals ain’t yokels after all. 😉

    Shalom y’all,



  7. jillyfunnell says:

    I really like this. World-weary dry humour used to emphasise the drama.


  8. granonine says:

    This is a horror story that I don’t think ever happens–sure gave the photographer a scare, which is really all that was needed 🙂


  9. The locals usually do know what they’re talking about. Good story!


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